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PIGS RULE ANIMAL FARM

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POL: Part for the Whole

The poem that I have chosen for the Poetry Out Loud competition is "Part For the Whole" by Robert Francis. I found this poem by randomly selecting three poems out of the poems that started with the same letter. I didn't pick this poem because of length or difficulty, I chose the content in which it stands for. Robert Francis usually makes shorter poems but includes meaning to him and the world he lives in. The basic picture you get from this poem is the sun. Each stanza shows how the sun is view from all places. The poem is trying to tell the reader a section of what you need, is all you need. Sometimes beauty can blind what you really need; the natural effect is all you need, and not covered by removable beauty. This meaning could also go along with the theme of the movie/book, The Princess and the Frog. The main theme for that movie/book is, only want what you need. Poems such as this one, relates to me by demonstrating how everyone takes too much than really need. From kids to elderly adults, they still have their times when one is too selfish to another. It happens daily to everyone.

My poem could sound happy, could sound sad, or could sound crazy. Everyone will have different tones for their poems, but if the whole class did the same poem, you could see people may interpret the tone or meaning differently as others. I'm not going to recite my poem as a whimsical tone or expressions. I'm also not going to be somber, I decide I will use an explanatory voice with dramatic emphasis. My face will show one emotion only, a leap of faith. The poem is trying to tell what is happening with burst of light, and I don't want to say the poem having a happy voice. The poem includes the word, "catch" twice. I will look up to the ceiling and pretend to catch something firmly in my hand. For this line in the poem, "Echoes the western sky, and even less" I will project my voice on the word echoes and bring my voice to a whisper when I say the western sky. "Part for the Whole" poem may be using the sun to imagine the meaning but sometimes it is recited without a bright voice.

ASAP URGENT PARAGRAPH EC!

The last time we did the five point paragraph, I had tons to work on. When my paragraph was critiqued, I was graded down because my language was not precise, my thesis was written well, missed a transition, and proofreading my paper. I am truly confident that my thesis proves something what I am writing about. Our class had revised and edited many times with our thesis's, so I think overall our class have great topic sentence that proves something. My writing style was graded down because I was too vague explaining points in my paragraph. I've worked with my point sentences and tried to be as descriptive as possible. I tried different transitions and worked them in, the transitions I have picked are usually ones that aren't chosen very often. My paper has grammar mistakes and I had switching tenses, as in, I started out with present tense then the next sentence was past tense. I had trouble with my last paper because I couldn't decide between certain words to put in my paper. My paper has been proof read by other people including myself, I think I have improved these specific skills in my current five point paragraph paper.

Poetry Out Loud

Part 1:

1. A poem that starts with the letter G: Grief by Elizabeth Barrett Browning

2. A poem that begins with the letter L: Layabout by John Brehm

3. A poem I suggest: Medusa by Louise Bogan. Poem that partner suggested: Trees by Joyce Kilmer

4. Pride by Yusef Kommunyakaa, Part for the Whole by Robert Francis

Part 2:

I liked the poem, Medusa by Louise Bogan, because it was unique and clever. I also liked this poem for its symbolism further than a mythical creature. The next poem i liked was Layabout by John Brehm. It was very in depth, and it is interesting to follow along. I didn't enjoy the poem Trees by Joyce Kilmer among my poems I chose , I thought the poem was simple and wasn't as interesting as much. As well I liked, Pride by Yusef Kommunyakaa. I would pick this poem because it has self meaning, and I think what the poem is trying to tell is true. I want to do, Part for the Whole by Robert Francis, as my Poetry Out Loud poem.

Part 3:

 I think the two criteria that would be the easiest for me in the competition are physical presence and dramatic appropriateness. I can look confident presenting my poem, and I do not over exaggerate the dramatic emphasis in the poem. The criteria that I will have trouble on would be voice/articulation and evidence of understanding. I'm worried that I will not pronounce words correctly. The way I say a phrase of words can mistaken the poem's literary devices. 

Part 4: 

I watched Allison Strong present, Sonnet CXXX: My Mistress' Eyes Are Nothing Like The Sun by William Shakespeare. Allison chose a poem that was harder than others, and recited it very well. She did enough dramatic presence that isn't over the top, it expressed tone, theme, and diction better.

 William Farley had a successful recitation too. He recited, Danse Russe by William Carlos Williams. His performance was done very well, I could tell he understood the poem and expressed tone and theme greatly.

Part 5:

Poetry Out Loud seems loads of fun to do even with such high criteria. It's fun because most students find poems that have reason to their personally relation to themselves. I really want to recite Part For the Whole by Robert Francis because its its elegantly written with such imagery. I like the poems that takes you on an image until the reading is over. It will be hard to get a good score, but I'll still enjoy it all.

Lobsters

In my classroom discussion about the poem, “Lobsters”, we were questioning the context of the poem.  We had questions such as, “Why does the author, Howard Nemerov, use odd descriptions of the colors?”, so on and forth. My discussion group was talking about the literal meaning versus symbolic. The group I watched seemed far more interesting than the one I was in. They went beyond the thinking of the symbolic terms from the poem. I remember one classmate introduced the symbolic idea of the poem was similar to the slave trade coming to the New World. When our teacher read the theme of the poem, I was shocked. ‘Death is inevitable’, I would have never know that by just reading, annotating, and analyzing the poem. I have always been a bright thinker however, during the class discussions I could tell we were leading into a theme that might be darker than expected.

 

I thought the theme of the poem was easy. My theme was about what things humans should/shouldn’t take advantage of. The theme I chose was the starting point to the specific theme in mind. Our discussion also talked about the comparison between the lobsters and spiders. I couldn’t imagine the similarities my classmates found in the poem that were symbolical meanings about the two animals. The discussion make me think beyond the text and my own thinking, it’s like we dropped into a universe below us where we think further than the concrete idea.

Working on the 5 part paragraph

What I’ve notice during the five part paragraphs that I listened to had weak or no transitions. Paragraphs need transitions to make the paper flow when changing topics or points. Without transitions, you feel you are jumping to one point to another or, it just sounds choppy. Most papers I listened to had great paragraphs, strong points, but the transitions were weak. It was like BAM! When we heard the commentary, then readers lost interest and didn’t know what the next point was or where it started. I also saw people repeated terms many times through their paper. Papers would sound repetitive and get boring, they would sound like they went on forever.

I haven’t heard my paper critique yet but I know already that I have lots to improve on.  My paragraph wouldn’t stand out I think. There was no vocabulary, I had basics words. Everything was plain; it wasn’t as extravagant as others. My work could pull off as good but not great. I had weak and repetitive commentary on the concrete detail. I could improve on my hook, I think it wouldn’t catch the reader’s attention, but I did like the points that I was trying to prove.

Low Diction

This has been an on and off week! I've been working my butt off earlier this week. I was working on finishing different projects because I was going to leave Wednesday and be gone for two weeks. I haven't got any sleep until Wednesday night. I wouldn't want to work on my assignments on my "family vacation" but, I wouldn't like making up All my assignments once I got back.once I survived my prensentations in each of my classes I started to feel better. after school I had to pack two luggage for two different vacations that were back to back. There was no other thing I would wanna do then pack my bags and get outta there. I coulda slept more but I just wanted to make sure I packed everything I needed. The next morning I was excited to get on the plane. Getting the ticket and through security was a piece of cake. After the plane took off I started to do my homework and the girl next to me handed a note that said, 'how old are you? By the way I'm Ella. At first I was confused then I started laughing. We had like a long conversation. Once I arrived in O'Hare I knew I would have an awesome time.

Once I got here I hung out with one of my bestest friends. It's so fun to be here because I can't stop laughing no matter how hard I try! I got to hang out with some family members and my friends family. Later on in the week we stayed at a hotel the day before the wedding. The day of the wedding I got to see everyones hair and make up done. I had fun dancing with my friends and family. My friend and I drank like 10 shirly temples at that wedding, but I was so tired at the end of the wedding.

My writing My way..(Extra Credit!)

One of my favorite writing assignments is one that I did last year called Sun. This assignment, each student had to pick whether they like rain or sun better, I chose sun because i thought it would be easier to write about.Our task was to write a realistic story that ties into the sun or rain subject. The assignment was supposedly be a quick assignment, but felt super long and boring to me! while we had the whole class period to start on it, I just daydreamed and forgotten all about the assignment because I couldn't think of anything. 

Next day we get the whole class period to work on our writing, since it was the last period day it feels like the longest. Looking out the window always got my boredom out. Near the end of the school day I looked at the window, which I sat close by, and saw the sun shining brightly. I was admiring everything/everyone outside enjoying the sun. I wished so bad for school to be over, and that became my idea for my writing assignment. My paper was counting down from fifteen minutes to the end of school. It included  onomatopoeias, realistic imagery of the outside, and tons of metaphors and similes. whatever i saw outside it made my story build and shows the reader how long time really is. This is one of my favorite papers because I enjoyed writing what was right in front of me. 

I always liked poetry, but not the boring poems which sounds "depressing but beautiful". They bore me because the audience already gets the point you're trying to get across. Meaningful poems are somewhat good but it goes on forever and you just start daydreaming until that poem is over.

I like the poems that have such a hook your mind is blanked out how it could be so mind blowing! I also like the poems that have silly devices to use and useless less words that will always get the crowd giggling. Imagery is one of my strengths in poetry or just plain writing; I just like analyzing/viewing anything and be descriptive as possible to let my audience know what exactly I'm seeing/hearing in my perspective.

My E-X-T-R-A Credit Blog hopefully I'll get enough points :)

The Joy Luck Club

For my outside reading book I chose, The Joy Luck Club, by Amy Tan. I never thought of reading any ethnic books such as this one. I wanted to read something different, because reading the same types of books over and over again can become boring after awhile. My book so far is introducing the eight main characters, four moms and four daughters. Each chapter is about a character's story, I think it will be a great plot. Readers would put together the pieces of the story and make it lead up to an exciting climax. I'm really interested how the eight characters will relate later on in the story. I predict Jing-Mei Woo will gather a meeting, and all the characters will be discussing a similar disaster in their families.
The characters make up the story being told. I haven't been introduce to all the main characters, but I'm guessing it'll be a key point. Each mother and daughter have a link in their childhood stories. For example; Ying-Ying St. Clair talks about Amah burning the five evils, whereas Lena St. Clair, her daughter, saw the bad things that were going to happen to children. The characters make the reader predict their actions through the course of the story. In this book, the characters have interesting/unusual backgrounds which have hidden relations with other characters or symbolism. 

One of my annotations from this book was about the theme of the part in the book called, The Twenty-Six Malignant Gates. Each page of ,The Twenty-Six Malignant Gates, had a picture of terrible danger to young innocent children. From this allusion, you already know the characters involved might be or seen the destruction of innocence. I think this part of the book is similar to the theme in, To Kill a Mockingbird. This is because the symbol of that book is that the mockingbird stands for the innocence. No one is suppose to kill a mockingbird because it's just like destroying innocence.

For the creative project I would like to do a poster of the contradicting characters . I think that will tell enough of the book. The whole book is around these eight characters. 

TKAM Extending the Theme

To Kill a Mockingbird was one of the most meaningful books I have ever read. Many themes can be made through many parts of the book. If you had enough time, I would guess you could probably come up with a theme for each chapter easily.

To Kill a Mockingbird reminded me my about my childhood limits. I thought about how I would react if I was in Scout's shoes. We had similar experiences at school when I was her age. "It's best reading with a fresh mind. You tell him I'll take over from here and try to undo the damage-" I can relate to Scouts experience when she knew more things than other students, and when she didn't meant to be able to learn how to read. In my first grade class we had to write or names in the beginning of the year and compare how well we improved. Majority of my classmates didn't write very well at the beginning of the year, when we compared and contrast, I felt unimproved. I dressed tom-boyish and had other relatives that were over the top, miss dressy too shoes. My family teased me for wearing jean pants or shorts and a normal t-shirt. You would only see me in a dress once every three months to school. While I was reading this book, it reminded me a lot of my six to seven year old look.

During the course of the book, I don't get a direct understanding. I usually read the next section and the idea pops back into my head. I didn't notice how Jem or Scout acts "adult-like" in some events, only looking back in various sections. Harper Lee has nice smooth transitions which make the reader blend to the upcoming event instead of the writing choppy transitions.

The characters are the key, key part in making it interesting. The characters have different personalities that contrast with other characters which gives an exciting plot!

Bye Bye for now, see ya next week!